Wednesday, August 18, 2010

Ebon Knight #1 (p. 7)

Previous Scene: Page 6

PANEL 1
Angus MacTavish (Ebon Knight) and Sylvia Franco lie in bed, their bodies discretely covered by a tartan blanket. Angus looks pleased with himself while Sylvia looks away, distracted.

Angus is a muscular young black man with short hair. He looks like he's been through a lot, but he does have a warm smile.

Sylvia is a gorgeous brunette, curvy yet very fit.  [I've always imagined her looking like Monica Bellucci].
ANGUS: They'd come after me with a lynch mob back east, you know? 

SYLVIA: What? 
PANEL 2
Angus and Sylvia turn to look at each-other. Angus is still smiling and Sylvia looks serious.
ANGUS: A lynch mob. You know. 'Cause you're a white girl.

SYLVIA: You don't seem too upset about it.
PANEL 3
Close-in shot of Angus' face with a view of a Silverlode Sentinel on the nightstand. The headline reads "NAZI MOBS LOOT, BURN, MURDER".

ANGUS: Why should I be? This ain't Georgia. They don't go lynching black folks here in Silverlode. They treat us with respect.
PANEL 4
View of Sylvia, gesturing behind her to several ornate but otherwise mundane suits of plate armor. A glimpse of the window can also be seen, with a partial view of the Silverlode skyline in the approaching dawn.   

SYLVIA: Do they? I look at your craftsmanship and cannot believe that you are only a simple machinist. Do you believe that Blue Horizons is treating you fairly? That you are being paid as much as your white peers? 
PANEL 5
View of Angus and Sylvia sitting up in bed. Angus furrows his brows and crosses his arms defensively while Sylvia leans in closer.

ANGUS: No, not exactly.
SYLVIA: But with your talents you should be...
PANEL 6
Close up of Sylvia's face looking a bit conspiratorial.

SYLVIA: Have you ever thought about getting even?

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NOTES (Mythic conventions detailed here)


CHAOS FACTOR 5

CHARACTER LIST:
1. Thug 1
2. Mugsy
3. Sylvia Franco
4. Mr. Ferrazzo (forgot to include him before)

THREAD LIST: 
1. Discover what's in the box and properly dispose of it
2. Get medical help for Sylvia
3. Establish Sylvia and Angus' romantic connection
4. Put a stop to Mr. Ferrazzo's criminal activities

EXPECTED SCENE: Some kind of flash-back scene to Angus and Sylvia's tryst. The first thing that pops into my head is the two lying in bed together (even though it is not very Golden Age).

PANEL 1
CQ: What is the topic of conversation [Mythic Event Meaning]? Gratify Attention 

PANEL 2
(Conversation continues)

PANEL 3
CQ: Where is the conversation going [Mythic Event Meaning]? Divide Art. Sylvia will comment on Angus' metal work in a moment. But I need to steer the conversation to the reason why they are together. Dropping details about the setting and the character's background would be helpful as well.

CQ: What is the headline of the Sentinel [Wikipedia]? Kalinowo. Free associate to Kristallnacht (Nov 9... thus dating romantic tryst to Nov 10,1938).

PANEL 4
Q: Can you see the Silverlode skyline from Angus' ranch [Unlikely]? Extreme yes (direction from the northwest).

PANEL 5
Continue conversation

PANEL 6
Q: Does Sylvia probe Angus to see if he's be willing to betray his employer [Likely]? Yes. As implied when she first entered the story, she's "working for a rival gang" (whatever that means). It is likely that she seduced Angus with the express purpose of enlisting his aid as an inside man.

(Left unresolved... Angus' response and how he came to be racing down the alley to interrupt the heist... not to mention Mr. Ferrazzo)

2 comments:

Trey said...

I like the new comic book script style. Interesting adventure.

Risus Monkey said...

Thanks. I'm having fun with it, which is the important thing. I love that Mythic has already thrown me in a direction that I didn't expect).